Last class: what we learned

July 5, 2018

Let’s share what worked for you in the class. What you want more of. Share with one another. I must turn in grades by Monday evening.


Allen Ginsberg’s list of writing slogans

July 5, 2018

Interesting word, slogans. I’m printing the whole thing which was posted on the Huffington Post  by Amy Hertz who worked with Ginsberg for many years.


Two decades’ experiences teaching poetics at Naropa Institute, half decade at Brooklyn College, and occasional workshops at Zen Center & Shambhala/Dharmadhatu weekends have been boiled down to brief mottoes from many sources found useful to guide myself and others in the experience of “writing the mind.” —Allen Ginsberg


“First thought is best in Art, second in other matters.” —William Blake

I. GROUND (Situation, or Primary Perception)

    1. “First Thought, Best Thought” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche
    2. “Take a friendly attitude toward your thoughts.” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche
    3. “The Mind must be loose.” —John Adams
    4. “One perception must immediately and directly lead to a further perception.” —Charles Olson, “Projective Verse”
    5. “My writing is a picture of the mind moving.” —Philip Whalen
    6. Surprise Mind —Allen Ginsberg
    7. “The old pond, a frog jumps in, Kerplunk!” —Basho
    8. “Magic is the total delight (appreciation) of chance” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche
    9. “Do I contradict myself?
      Very well, then I contradict myself,
      (I am large. I contain multitudes.)” —Walt Whitman
    10. “…What quality went to form a man of achievement, especially in literature? …Negative capability, that is, when a man is capable of being in uncertainties, mysteries, doubts, without any irritable reaching after fact & reason.” —John Keats
    11. “Form is never more than an extension of content.” —Robert Creeley to Charles Olson
    12. “Form follows function.” —Frank Lloyd Wright
    13. Ordinary Mind includes eternal perceptions. —A.G.
    14. “Nothing is better for being Eternal
      Nor so white as the white that dies of a day.” —Louis Zukofsky
    15. Notice what you notice. —A.G.
    16. Catch yourself thinking. —A.G.
    17. Observe what’s vivid. —A.G.
    18. Vividness is self-selecting. —A.G.
    19. “Spots of Time” —William Wordsworth
    20. If we don’t show anyone we’re free to write anything. —A.G.
    21. “My mind is open to itself.” —Gelek Rinpoche
    22. “Each on his bed spoke to himself alone, making no sound.” —Charles Reznikoff

II. PATH (Method or Recognition)

    1. “No ideas but in things.” “…No ideas but in the Facts.” —William Carlos Williams
    2. “Close to the nose.” —W.C.Williams
    3. “Sight is where the eye hits.” —Louis Zukofsky
    4. “Clamp the mind down on objects.” —W.C.Williams
    5. “Direct treatment of the thing…” (or object.)” —E.Pound, 1912
    6. “Presentation, not reference…” —Ezra Pound
    7. “Give me a for instance.” —Vernacular
    8. “Show not tell.” —Vernacular
    9. “The natural object is always the adequate symbol.” —Ezra Pound
    10. “Things are symbols of themselves.” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche
    11. “Labor well the minute particulars, take care of the little ones
      He who would do good for another must do it in minute particulars
      General Good is the plea of the Scoundrel Hypocrite and Flatterer
      For Art & Science cannot exist but in minutely organized particulars” —William Blake
    12. “And being old she put a skin/On everything she said.” —W.B.Yeats
    13. “Don’t think of words when you stop but to see the picture better.” —Jack Kerouac
    14. “Details are the Life of Prose.” —Jack Kerouac
    15. Intense fragments of spoken idiom, best. —A.G.
    16. “Economy of Words” —Ezra Pound
    17. “Tailoring” —Gregory Corso
    18. Maximum information, minimum number of syllables. —A.G.
    19. Syntax condensed, sound is solid. —A.G.
    20. Savor vowels, appreciate consonants. —A.G.
    21. “Compose in the sequence of the musical phrase, not in sequence of a metronome.” —Ezra Pound
    22. “…awareness…of the tone leading of the vowels.” —Ezra Pound
    23. “…an attempt to approximate classical quantitative meters…” —Ezra Pound
    24. “Lower limit speech, upper limit song” —Louis Zukofsky
    25. “Phanopoeia, Melopoeia, Logopoeia.” —Ezra Pound
    26. “Sight, Sound & Intellect.” —Louis Zukofsky
    27. “Only emotion objectified endures.” — Louis Zukofsky

III. FRUITION (Result or Appreciation)

  1. Spiritus = Breathing = Inspiration = Unobstructed Breath
  2. “Alone with the Alone” —Plotinus
  3. Sunyata (Skt.) = Ku (Japanese) = Emptiness
  4. “What’s the sound of one hand clapping?” —Zen Koan
  5. “What’s the face you had before you were born?” —Zen Koan
  6. Vipassana (Skt.) = Clear Seeing
  7. “Stop the world” —Carlos Casteneda
  8. “The purpose of art is to stop time.” —Bob Dylan
  9. “The unspeakable visions of the individual.” —J.K.
  10. “I’m going to try speaking some reckless words, and I want you to try to listen recklessly.” —Chuang Tzu, (Tr. Burton Watson)
  11. “Candor” —Whitman
  12. “One touch of nature makes the whole world kin.” —Shakespeare
  13. “Contact” —A Magazine, Nathaniel West & W.C. Williams, Eds.
  14. “God Appears & God is Light
    To those poor Souls who dwell in Night
    But does a Human Form Display
    To those who Dwell in Realms of day.” —W. Blake
  15. Subject is known by what she sees. —A.G.
  16. Others can measure their visions by what we see. —A.G.
  17. Candor ends paranoia. —A.G.
  18. “Willingness to be Fool.” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche
  19. “day & night/you’re all right” —Corso
  20. Tyger: “Humility is Beatness.” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche & A.G.
  21. Lion: “Surprise Mind” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche & A.G.
  22. Garuda: “Crazy Wisdom Outrageousness” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche
  23. Dragon: “Unborn Inscrutability” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche
  24. “To be men not destroyers” —Ezra Pound
  25. “Speech synchronizes mind & body.” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche
  26. “The Emperor unites Heaven & Earth.” —Chögyam Trungpa, Rinpoche
  27. “Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.” —Shelley
  28. “Make it new” —Ezra Pound
  29. “When the mode of music changes, the walls of the city shake” —Plato
  30. “Every third thought shall be my grave” —W. Shakespeare, “The Tempest”
  31. “That in black ink my love may still shine bright” —W. Shakespeare, Sonnets
  32. “Only emotion endures” —Ezra Pound
  33. “Well while I’m here I’ll
    do the work—
    and what’s the Work?
    To ease the pain of living.
    Everything else, drunken
    dumbshow.” —A.G.
  34. “…Kindness, sweetest
    of the small notesin the world’s ache,
    most modest & gentle
    of the elements

    entered man before history
    and became his daily
    connection, let no man

    tell you otherwise.” —Carl Rakosi

Take a look at what else is going on in Allen Ginsberg’s work.

Final meeting Thursday

July 2, 2018

No meeting Tuesday July 3.

Our last meeting will be about the experience of writing a story. What did you learn? What went well? What did you like the most? What should we have done more of?

Let’s be on time at 5 and get through by 6:15.

Something you might like

June 28, 2018

A writers’ group called Writers Block.

Here’s the web site.

Check it out.

No class Tuesday July 2. Last class: Thursday July 5.

June 28, 2018

If you have questions or problems in the writing process, email me about them. The main thing is write an organized draft and then revise it and make it better.


How to type a manuscript

June 28, 2018

A few simple pieces of advice.

Write a title and a by-line.

For example:

The Death of a Poet

by Michael Berryhill

Indent the paragraphs. Do you know how to do that with the little triangle at the top of the Word document where the margins re set? Move it in five spaces.

Set the line spacing at a space and a half. That’s in the format section of Word under paragraphs. Using space and half makes the paper easier to read, both when you’re writing and when I’m reading. Double spacing is too big.

Write with an outline. Put in subtitles. The chapters are about 400 to 600 words. Write everything you have to say about a topic in the chapter. Write a beginning, a middle and an end for the chapters.

Write a rough draft as fast as you can, but use the outline. then let it rest, and revise and edit. This is the most critical step. You must rewrite. You must rewrite.

And run spell and grammar check.

Yikes! University is closed Friday

June 27, 2018

Amita is coming on Monday.

Rebekah can you come Thursday at 5?


June 26, 2018

Thursday June 28

3 Stephen

4 Shannon

5 Available!!!

6 Amanda

Monday July 2

11:30 Amita



Stephen Minter’s outline

June 26, 2018

Stephen Minter

June 17, 2018

Jour 505 Art of Narrative


My story will be based on a young man’s journey post college. From dealing with the pressures of being the first male in his family to graduate college and to the early 20’s blues this story will tell how a young man from Chicago battled mental illness and the unfortunate uncertainties of the world.

Title: Finding His Way

Time and place: Chicago, Summer 2016 following graduation from Bradley University

Themes in the story: Family, Mental Health Awareness, African American Stereotypes and stigma, Education

Chapter 1: The story will open with him packing up his car after graduation and getting on the road back home to Chicago. All his family already left him and headed back home so he must travel home by himself. On the road he does a lot of thinking and conversing with himself. When getting back home over the next few days he begins to get contacted by family members who couldn’t make the graduation and is flooded with questions of what’s next.

Chapter 2: The pressures of trying to find a job or internship matched with the difficulties of home is growing more and more difficult for him to deal with and process. He had to leave his apartment at college to move back home with his mom and teenage sister whose relationship is very toxic right now. Not only does he have to deal with the negativity surrounding their relationship, he also must deal with not having his own space in their condo so he’s subject to sleeping on a couch and living out of the totes he packed his apartment up in. With this he begins to develop anxiety because he does not have his own space and cannot process his thoughts because the introvert in him requires alone time to function.

Chapter 3: He begins working and although he doesn’t pay many bills the ones he does have aren’t being take care of with his biweekly salary. With the stress of not having his own space, not being able to really pay his bills, not recognizing his anxiety, he is also dealing with his mother’s constant reminders of the dangers of Chicago and how he doesn’t feel as though she won’t recognize that he is an adult.

Chapter 4: Summer is slowly coming to an end and he’s still struggling financially and had begun to develop of sense of uncertainty because he does not know any other ways to really come of the cloudy place he’s been in and is also starting to resent himself for not utilizing his degree as he watches everyone around him be content with their regular jobs because he knows he wants more for himself. This plant seeds of self-doubt and depression. After now weeks of trying to avoid his true feelings and emotions regarding the anxiety and depression on his way home he had a blowout on the expressway and almost crashed. While he was okay and physically, and his car had no real damage this sparked a nervous breakdown within him.

Chapter 5: Days later after being so lost, down and not wanting to deal with anything or anyone he finally realizes he is far more sad than usual and he self diagnoses his self with anxiety and depression. Reluctantly researching these two illnesses he realizes he’s seen these illnesses in other family members and friends and understands in order for him to not to follow in their footsteps he has to acknowledge this and take control of the situation before it not only kills his spirit, motivation, and drive to succeed but kills him.

Chapter 6: Will be a letter from me to him as his friend basically showing him support and identifying with his struggles being from the same demographic background. Just basically showing my support and subconsciously explaining to the readers the severity of mental illness to our readers through my letter to him among with addressing other things people in their early 20s face.

A full outline from Amanda

June 26, 2018

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